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Essay On Youth Crime

Task 2 IELTS Writing Sample:
Youth Crime - Reasons and Solutions

by Toshpulatov Lenur
(Termiz, Surkhandarya, Uzbekistan)

Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world.


What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.


There is no doubt that, almost every good and bad field has developed significantly over the past few decades and it is too visiable in behaviour and actions of young people. As many people have mentioned that, in many cities around the globe rates of crime by teenagers are increasing unexpectedly. The goverment as well as parents are trying to find solution for this international problem. Many people believe that, wisely chosen punishment is the best way to control the number of crimes in society. While, some of them believe that, it is not the only way to reduce the level of crime. They think that, there must be another way.

First of all, no one can deny that, according to the recent figures, there is an increase in violent, robber and even murder crimes among young people. As many scientists have claimed that,the main reason for this is that, nowadays, youth are growing with lack of pay attention by their parents but also teachers. Moreover, children are not getting social and emotional knowledge at their schools.

Second of all, action movies with murder, robber are being popular amongst youth. It is clearly seen that, these sort of movies lead to an increase crime among teenagers as they try to copy what they have seen in the movies. Futhermore, films have an important influence on young people who are influenced both by what they watch and hear.

Third of all, nowadays, no one does amaze, when read on newspapers and watch on the television about in most societies over the planet the number of crime is rising unexpectedly. In fact that, youth are breaking laws especially rights of people with way of violence.

From my point of view, the best way to control as well as reduce the number of crime is replace severe punishments than panleties are such as, financial and and even being in prison. Moreover, lack of social and emotional knowledge is one of the main factor to increase crime among youth due to the government should more pay attention to both education and law systems.

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There is no doubt that almost every good and bad field has developed significantly over the past few decades (I don’t understand what you have just said here) and it is visible in the behaviour and actions of young people. Many people have mentioned that in many cities around the globe rates of crime by teenagers are increasing unexpectedly. The government as well as parents are trying to find solutions for this international problem. Many people believe that wisely chosen punishment is the best way to control the number of crimes in society, while some believe that this is not the only way to reduce the level of crime. They think that, there must be another way.
(Your introduction is too long)

First of all, no one can deny that according to recent figures there has been an increase in violence, theft and even murders among young people.  Many scientists have claimed the main reason for this is that nowadays, youth are growing without paying attention to their parents and also teachers. Moreover, children are not getting social and emotional knowledge at their schools.

Secondly, action movies with murders and robberies are popular amongst youth. It can be clearly seen that these sorts of movies lead to an increase in crime among teenagers as they try to copy what they have seen in the movies.  Furthermore, films have an important influence on young people who are influenced both by what they watch and hear.

Thirdly, nowadays, no one is amazed when reading in newspapers and watching on the television that in most societies over in the world the number of crimes is rising unexpectedly. In fact, the youth are breaking laws, especially regarding the rights of people by using violence. (this paragraph does not answer the question in any way so it should not be here).

From my point of view, the best way to control as well as reduce the number of crimes is to replace weak sentences with severe punishments such as going to prison. Moreover, lack of social and emotional knowledge is one of the main factors to increase crime among youth so the government should more pay attention to both education and law systems.

(Where is the conclusion?)

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FURTHER COMMENTS


On a positive note, you do have some good ideas and content that are answering the question, and at various points you have some good grammar and phrasing. 

But at the same time, your grammar control is weak in a lot of places, as is your structure, and you don't write enough about the solutions.

More details are below.

Content / Organization

Firstly, your introduction is much too long.  Keep this shorter – see this lesson on writing an introduction:

Writing an IELTS Task 2 Introduction


Also, you do not appear to have a conclusion?

You also need to have more about the solutions.  This essay will probably be seen as not fully answering the question as there is so little on the solutions.  You would have been better taking out the forth paragraph and writing about solutions here instead as this paragraph does not answer the question.

Grammar


"They think that, there must be another way" = don’t use a comma after ‘that’. You make this mistake many times.

"recent figures there is an increase in violent" = should be ‘there has been…’. Use present perfect for something that started in the past and is still going on now.

Second of all / Third of all = you can’t say this, only ‘first of all’ is possible.

Coherence

You have some quite big problems with coherence because you have some sentences that I cannot understand.  For example:

"replace severe punishments than panleties are  such as, financial and and even being in prison"

I just guessed what you meant when I tried to correct it.


Return to IELTS Sample Student Writing

Through out history, sociologists have conjured different perspectives on society and social behavior, and from these observations sociological theories have been established. This paper will be focusing on one of these theories, which is the symbolic interactionist perspective. According to symbolic interactionist perspectives, society is the sum of the interactions of individuals and groups (Murray, Linden, & Kendall, 2011, p.20). These theorists emphasize on the interaction between one another and the symbols that represent meaning in human communication. This paper will be exploring the cause and effect of youth crime and analyzing this issue through a symbolic interactionist perspective.

The Symbolic Interactionist Perspective

According to McClelland (2009), interactionists focus on the subjective aspects of social life, rather than on objective, macro-structural aspects of social systems. Unlike functional theorists, Interactionists focus on the human being rather than the society as a whole. Functionalist and conflict theorists focus mainly on a macrolevel analysis, while symbolic interactionist approaches are based on a microlevel analysis. George Herbert Mead and Herbert Bloomer are accredited thinkers in contributing to this theory. They believed that society is the sum of interactions of individuals and groups and that symbols are created to represent something meaningful. Understanding these symbols that are created will help understand human behavior. This perspective focuses mainly on our actions as human beings and how those actions can be interpreted in society. This is explained further by, the process is further aided by our ability to think about and to react to our own actions and even our selves as symbolic objects. Thus, the interactionist theorist sees humans as active, creative participants who construct their social world, not as passive, conforming objects of socialization ( McClelland, 2009).

In society, not all members may choose to follow the rules and expectations and may contribute to the well being of the society in a negative way. All societies have some degree of defiance, which is described as – any behavior, belief, or condition that violates cultural norms in the society or group in which it occurs ( Murray et al., 2011, p. 169). This defiance is considered to be a threat to the social control of the society. Symbolic interactionists focus on how people learn what is appropriate in society through socializing with others. According to symbolic interactionists, deviance is learned in the same way as conformity- through interaction with others ( Murray et al., 2011, p. 173).

Youth Crime

According to statistics, in 2009, police identified nearly 165,000 youth accused of committing a crime. These included youth who were either charged (or recommended for charging) by police (42%) or dealt with by means other than the formal laying of a charge (58%) (Bressan & Taylor- Butts, 2008). Age is an important factor when viewing youth crime and deviance. “ Arrests increase from early adolescence, peak in young adult hood, and steadily decline with age” (Murray et al., 2011, p. 186). Youth crime is a growing as speak because of the many situations that adolescences may find themselves in, such as peer pressure and pressure of becoming an adult. This specific generation may carry attitudes that because they are minors, that the punishment may not be as harsh as opposed to being charged as an adult. Research shows that, “ harsher sentences for youths (or adults) do not reduce reoffending. Nor would harsher sentences deter others” (Doob & McMurtry, 2011). Even if the government were to impose harsher punishments for youth, this would still not stop youth from reoffending. The most important tactic to help reduce youth crime would be to encourage positive attitudes upon these youth. To do this, theory shows that putting youth in an environment with people who are unlikely to commit a crime will help decrease juvenile offenses. Violent youth tend to have co- occurring problems such as substance abuse, dropping out of school, gang membership, teenage pregnancy, and victimization (Government of Nova Scotia, 2008) . Other types of crime committed by youth involve gang related activity and possession of weapons. Evidence of gang involvement was reported by police in 22% of homicides with a youth accused( Bressan & Taylor- Butts, 2008). Statistics Canada also emphasizes that Drug-related crimes among youth have climbed dramatically over the last 10 years, with a rate of drug offences among youth in 2006 that was nearly double (+97%) that of 10 years earlier (Bressan & Taylor- Butts, 2008). This is a frightening and important statistic that needs to be addressed and should open people’s eyes up to the staggering amount of crimes that youth can commit.

Differential Association

During adolescence years, are usually when youth are breaking away from their parents and may feel that they have little responsibility or social role. Adolescence at this time may believe that they have the mindset that they have the knowledge to survive in society. This urge to be on their own leads to mislead choices that may lead to crime. Symbolic theorist, Edwin Sutherland developed a theory that could explain how one may be more likely to commit a crime when exposed to it through social interaction.“ Differential association theory states that individuals have a greater tendency to deviate from societal norms when they frequently associate with persons who favor deviance over conformity”(Murray et al., 2011, p.173). This theory connects with youth specifically, because during adolescent years peers are an important agent of socialization. Youths shy away from their parents at this age, and tend to gravitate towards their peers for acceptance into society. This need to become accepted by peers is often an important objective for many youth. Being accepted by peers, leads to more friends, which is essential to many youth. More friends lead to greater access to pleasures that youths strive to achieve.

Pleasures such as: parties, alcohol, and behaviors that may not always be legal. These pleasures are more attractive as oppose to: hanging out, camping, watching a movie with parents, which in their childhood was considered fun. “ Peer groups function as agents of socialization by contributing to our sense of belonging and our feelings of self worth” ( Murray et al., 2011, p. 96). So when youth choose to associate with the “ wrong crowd”, this is when youth deviance is at its highest. One may be exposed to feelings of peer pressure to commit crimes because they want to be accepted by their peers. Individuals must earn their acceptance with their peers by conforming to a given group’s norms, attitudes, speech patterns, and dress codes. When we conform to our peer group’s expectations, we are rewarded; if we do not conform, we may be ridiculed or even expelled from the group (Murray et al., 2011, p. 97). This is a time in ones life, where they may be confused as who they want to be in life, which may cause them to make the unwise choices, especially in the people they choose to associate themselves with. Differential association explains that youth will always put the interests of their friends first, which could get them into trouble. “ Ties to other deviants can be particularly important in organized crime where the willingness of peers to stand up for one another affects maintain power in the face of violent opposition from competitors” ( Murray et al., 2011, p.174).

Labeling

Another symbolic theory that adds to why youth commit crime is the labeling theory. The labeling theory suggests that deviants are those people who have been successfully labeled as such by others. When youth accept this stigma as being a “ trouble maker”, they will therefore carry out these crimes. “ People accept a negative label or stigma that has been applied to them, the label may contribute to the type of behavior it initially was meant to control” (Murray et al., 2011, p. 175). For example, if a teenager gets caught doing drugs, others label he/ or her as a deviant. This label of being a “ drug user” may carry on to parents, the school, and the community, which makes it difficult for the youth to shake this label off. One’s parents may become overly strict and protective of this teenager, and in turn the school may punish this teenager, while the community may being treating this individual differently based on this label. Youth on the other hand is contemporaneously expected to be an age of deviance, disruption, and wickedness (Brown & Brown, 2008). Once an individual accepts a label of becoming a deviant, this individual may begin to act on this label by committing crimes.

Present society is also another contributing factor that can add to youth labeling themselves otherwise deviant attributes. Another important agent of socialization is the media. Young people are more impressionable. What’s important in a youth’s daily life? They are music, books, magazines, movie, and television shows. In this medias, drinking, smoking, sexual behaviors and the “high life” of using drugs are often popularized. These are considered right or “normal” behaviors among youths, in other words these are considered “cool”. An example, a popular show amongst youths is the show “jersey shore”, where youths are portrayed as “party animals”. They drink, smoke, fight, and swear obscene language. Why do they do this? It’s because it is accepted amongst youth as the “right” behavior for a young person. Hence, to do these acts, such as smoking and drinking, would be accepted by peers. So when the youth label them selves as these traits, they act on them and make it their identity.

Conclusion

Research has shown that, intervening in multiple systems that simultaneously target multiple risk factors for criminality (eg. individual child factors, family factors, school factors, peer factors, and community factors yields significant results in prevention and reduction of delinquency (British Columbia Representative for Children and Youth Kids, 2009). In order to help prevent and intervene in youth crime, all of these factors must be addressed. This paper has specifically addressed peer factors and the attitudes an individual and society may have to contribute to deviant behavior. The differential and labeling theories are key elements to deviant behavior and symbolizes why youth act the way they do. Symbolic theorists believe that the interaction with others is a main component of why deviance occurs, especially when it’s with the wrong crowd.

References
British Columbia Representative for Children and Youth Kids. (2009). Crime and care: health and well being of children in care: youth Justice Experiences and Outcomes. Retrieved from http://site.ebrary.com.auth01.norquest.ca/lib/norquest/docDetail.action?docID=10330457&p00=youth%20crime%20prevention Brown, L., & Brown, S. (2008) Understanding youth and crime (2nd ed.). New York, NY:

McGraw- Hill Education.
Bressan, A., & Taylor- Butts, A. (2008) Youth crime in Canada. Retrieved from
http://www.statcan.gc.ca/pub/85-002-x/2008003/article/10566-eng.htm Doob, A. N., & McMurtry R.R. (2011, November 7). When tough is not smart; harsh sentencing rules only make youth crime worse. Toronto Star. Retrieved from http://proquest.umi.com.auth01.norquest.ca/pqdweb?index=4&did=2504620081&SrchMode=1&sid=2&Fmt=3&VInst=PROD&VType=PQD&RQT=309&VName=PQD&TS=1333670712&clientId=59668 Government of Nova Scotia ( 2008, May) Perspectives on youth crime in nova scotia. Retrieved from http://site.ebrary.com.auth01.norquest.ca/lib/norquest/docDetail.action?docID=10155296&p00=youth%20crime McClelland, K. (2009). Symbolic interactionism

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